This is feedback from the media classes on my First draft of my opening sequence for media
Holding Shot steady where appropriate
Everyone said this was excellent, that all my shots were steady where appropriate, that the camerawork was excellent.
Framing a Shot
All the framing of the shots was said to be excellent including everything that was relevant and appropriate.
Using a Variety of shots & Distances
I used all the shot types (extreme close up, close up, mid, long shot, extreme lone shot) and did so at different angels (high &low). I used the shots appropriately keeping interest through the montage but apparently there were too many close ups, I will look at a way of taking out some of the close up although some said that the close up were like-able.
Using Titles Appropriatly
Titles were seen to vary from Proficient to excellent, they were known to be appropriate in style, font and colour, the simplicity of them shows how it is a high budget film and goes along with the documentary feel of the film but it was thought the spacing of the titles needed to be looked at.
Mise en Scene
The mise en scene of the tattoo parlour helped with giving to the topic of Tattoos being focus very clearly. The colours overall of the films were apparently very nice, it wasn't all the same colour throughout making it nice to look at but some people said the constant light to dark changes of the shots was not very good.
Editing so that the meaning is apparent
My editing was applauded and appropriate for the genre of a documentary. It was said that the opening starts more generally around the subject and then gets to the point, that the shots are in a good order. The interview is a bit too long though because it feels like it is the end of a film.
Shot transitions and other effects
Shots cut a lot because there are no real transition effects on the narration montages but apparently this goes well because it goes along with the narration and what the narrative that is trying to be put across and because of this it flows well. Also because of the transitioning from shot to shot being fast it gave the film pace which is what I wanted I wanted the fast pace top replicate the craziness of society and then to slow down once the complete narrative had been dropped.
Using sound with Images and editing
The music is really good and sets the atmosphere but sometimes the narrations. The tattoo parlour sound is loud and what is being said can barely be heard, something needs to be done here to improve. Subtitles could be used during the interviews.
